I want to thank Janet for giving me an opportunity to talk about
Consequences,
which is my second book for Meryton Press (actually, my second book, period!), which
will be published later in December. Like
my first book, A Most Civil Proposal, it’s a variation on Jane Austen’s Pride
and Prejudice, and both books originated as fan-fiction postings on the
old Hyacinth
Gardens website. I kind of
stumbled into reading and then writing Jane Austen fan-fiction by accident, and
it still surprises me that an engineer and former Marine would wind up writing
in Jane Austen’s world. But that’s
life—always full of surprises.
Anyway, both Consequences and A
Most Civil Proposal explore what might have happened if one little
thing in Austen’s work was changed. A
Most Civil Proposal, examined what might have happened if Darcy had
decided to make a more civil proposal at Hunsford rather than the proud and
arrogant proposal as in the book. Consequences
focuses on Elizabeth’s fiery and angry rejection of Darcy’s proposal as a
critical decision point, and the book is made up of two parts that explore two
different consequences resulting from that critical decision.
In Book 1, “The Road Not Taken,” the fortuitous meeting of
Elizabeth and Darcy at Pemberley and the re-kindling of their romance does not take
place. After all, that meeting was
highly coincidental in Austen’s Pride and Prejudice. What if Darcy had come along ten minutes
later, when Elizabeth and her party had already started their tour of the
Pemberley grounds? He would have entered the house and been in consultation
with his steward when the Gardiners and their niece emerged from the grounds,
boarded their carriage, and departed. And if he had been ten minutes earlier,
he might well have entered the house before they saw him. And even if Elizabeth
had seen him at a distance and recognized him while he didn’t see her, would
she have run after him and spoken to him? Highly doubtful, I would think. More
likely, she would have counted herself lucky to avoid the mortification of
meeting him. Thus, Darcy doesn’t learn
of Lydia’s elopement and doesn’t find the couple in London and rescue the
Bennet family’s reputation, and events go from bad to worse. High angst.
In contrast, in Book 2, “The Sleeper Wakes,” Elizabeth wakes
from a horrendous nightmare (which was everything that occurred in Book 1) at
Hunsford prior to Darcy’s proposal, and the lingering effects of that
mostly-unremembered-but-still-emotional event cause her to accept instead of
reject that proposal, which doesn’t turn out to be nearly the horrible mistake
that she thinks it will be.
When I originally posted the story at the old Hyacinth
Garden website, the (mostly female) readers wanted to lynch me at the end of
Book 1! I hope the publication of this
new book doesn’t end my writing career (such as it is!).
One thing that I want to mention, for those readers who
might have read the fan-fiction version I originally posted, is that the
preparation of Consequences for publication required a significant amount of
both rewriting the originally posted version and the addition of quite a bit of
additional material. My editor,
Christina Boyd, really challenged me in several areas, and, while the
experience was not always pleasant, I think she helped me correct some of my,
let us say, “awkward” tendencies. I’m
rather pleased with the improvement of the flow of the story, and I hope the
readers agree. I’m a trained engineer,
remember, not a professional writer, and I’m still learning. As for the additional material, that was
necessitated by the different audience I was writing to. When I wrote it for the fan-fiction audience,
I considered that I was writing to an audience that had likely committed Pride
and Prejudice to memory, and so I could leave out a lot of background
material. I could not do the same when
writing for a wider audience, though I also couldn’t just repeat what Austen
originally wrote. So there’s a lot more
content than in the original posting. In
addition, my editor suggested the addition of an “Author’s Q&A” section at
the back of the book, with a number of potential questions that readers might
have as well as my answers to those questions.
I was skeptical at first, but she said that such a section could be very
helpful if it was discussed by a book club.
That was news to me, but you have to trust your editor, right? So we put together a list of questions, such
as:
- What was the main
rationale that inspired the writing of Consequences?
- Was Elizabeth Bennet’s
rejection of Darcy’s first proposal at Hunsford justified in the context
of her times?
- Was the financial
situation of Elizabeth’s family really as extreme as postulated in “Book
1,” or was that a case of an author taking liberties to justify his
plotline?
Thanks again to Janet for again having me post again on her
blog, and I hope I haven’t scared off any potential readers. Below is a short excerpt from Consequences
for your perusal. Thanks for reading!
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Excerpt from Consequences:
Prologue
“The main thing
history can teach us is that human actions have consequences and that certain
choices, once made, cannot be undone. They foreclose the possibility of making
other choices, and thus they determine future events.”
—Gerda Lerner,
historian, author, teacher
Charlotte Collins was engaged in inspecting her hens when
she saw Mr. Darcy approaching the gate of the Parsonage, having come from the
direction of Rosings Park. When he spied her, he greeted her in his usual
polite but restrained manner, and she invited him to precede her to the house.
“I shall be there directly, Mr. Darcy,” she called. Turning
to the servant who held the basket partially filled with eggs, she said, “I
will finish here, Susan. Please go into the house and see the tea is set for
our visitor. And please inform Miss Elizabeth and my sister that Mr. Darcy has
called and I shall return to the house directly.”
Susan gave her mistress both the basket and a quick curtsey
before running into the house, followed at a more reasonable gait by Mr. Darcy.
Charlotte clucked her tongue disapprovingly, considering whether to admonish
Susan yet again for running, but decided against it, for the young girl seemed
naturally to break into a run whenever dispatched on an errand.
Of greater import to her was the thought of Mr. Darcy and
his frequent visits to the Parsonage. After his first impromptu visit, she
suggested to Elizabeth he must be in love with her, but her friend’s
description of the way he sat so silently, unable or unwilling to talk, made
the idea seem unlikely. Since then, Mr. Darcy and his cousin Colonel
Fitzwilliam made almost daily visits to the Parsonage, sometimes together,
sometimes separately, and even occasionally accompanied by their aunt.
Whatever Mr. Darcy’s motives, it was plain Colonel
Fitzwilliam visited because he had pleasure in their society, a conjecture
making him even more agreeable. Elizabeth remarked that his company was so
affable and his admiration of her so evident, it reminded her of her former
favourite, George Wickham. However, she continued, her assessment was that the
good colonel appeared to have the better-informed mind, even if he did not have
the same ability to captivate as did Mr. Wickham.
Charlotte had made no response to this evaluation since her
own opinion of Mr. Wickham was much at variance with that of her friend.
In any case, she
thought, as she finished gathering the eggs, I was thinking on Mr. Darcy and his reason for coming so often to the
Parsonage. It is most difficult to decipher since he does not appear to come
for the society. He frequently sits there for ten minutes without opening his
lips, and when he does speak, it seems to be driven by necessity and not by
choice — a sacrifice to propriety rather than a pleasure to himself.
The way in which Colonel Fitzwilliam occasionally laughed at
Mr. Darcy, for what he termed his cousin’s stupidity, made it seem likely he
was different on most other occasions. However, since she never witnessed such
pleasant behaviour from Mr. Darcy, she had no way of validating that
possibility. Charlotte would have liked to believe this change was due to
love—and the object of his love, her friend Eliza—so she set herself the task
of working it out. She watched him whenever they were at Rosings and whenever
he came to Hunsford, but she had little success. He certainly looked at
Elizabeth a great deal, but she had never been able to tell whether his
earnest, steadfast gaze was due to admiration or absence of mind.
Of late, after she observed Mr. Darcy most carefully, she
again suggested to Elizabeth the possibility of his being partial to her, but
this suggestion met with no more agreement than previously. Her friend simply
would not consider the suggestion seriously and always laughed at the idea.
Charlotte did not press the subject on those occasions; she did not want to
raise Eliza’s expectations for fear they might end in disappointment. In any
case, she was not worried by Elizabeth’s oft-professed dislike of Mr. Darcy,
for she was certain in her own mind that Elizabeth’s objections would vanish if
she ever had reason to believe he might be in her power. On that point, she had no doubts whatever.
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NOTE: This book has not been released yet so winners will not receive their copies until after the release date!
I look forward this reading this book. Wonderful ideas for what could have been.
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I've always enjoyed alternative history novels which are based on events turning out differently at a critical point, such as the South winning the Civil War. Both my books fall into that category. I hope you enjoy your read.
DeleteColin
O wow, this sounds really intriguing! I would love to win a paperback (don't have an e-reader). Thanks for the giveaway!
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I hope you still say that after Book 1 and aren't practicing tying knots with a rope and muttering darkly about lynching a poor, struggling author . . .
DeleteColin
From reading what this book is about and the prologue, your new novel has certainly piqued my interest. I like to experience how any Austenesque author take the story and throw in obstacles as long as Darcy and Elizabeth do end up together. So Consequences will not turn me off.
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I'm going to trust you on that!
DeleteColin
As I have yet to read A Most Civil Proposal this will make a second book added to my wish list at Amazon
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I love shopping at Amazon. I also love readers shopping at Amazon! :-)
DeleteColin
I loved A Most Civil Proposal and I am keenly interested in exploring the idea of one missed opportunity of Pemberley. It was pure chance and without it so much changes. Thanks for being 'brave' and tackling it.
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Thanks, Sophia. I didn't really expect "Consequences" to be my next effort, but my editor, Christina Boyd, actually advocated for that book. It was one of her favorites, and she really helped me improve my writing skills. It wasn't always pleasant to have to inspect your sentences with an eye out for Christina's comments, but I think it made the book a better book than it would have been. Christina actually will get, as they said in the old Star Trek series, "a piece of the action," and she deserves it.
DeleteColin
I feel apprehension with the plot of this book, although I have much curiosity it, too so I am a personal fight to read or not this story. I am sure that it is great work because I have read other books of this author, and they are excellent.
ReplyDeleteI hope that it has not a lot time before that Darcy and Elizabeth join themselves, finally.
Thank you, Janet for the opportunity to win a copy :D
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Have courage! You could always skip Book 1 and go right to Book 2!
DeleteColin
Colin, congrats for publishing this fantastic story ! Yes, I was one of those who wanted to lynch you but I am glad I didn't :) :) :) :) :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you didn't also, but you do remember the ladies were out after me with pitchforks and torches . . . That was at the half-way point, of course, and I hope I made it up to you with Book 2.
DeleteColin
I loved A Most Civil Proposal and would love the opportunity to win a copy of Colin's new book. After reading some of the comments above it sounds like there are other books by Colin to possibly be published in the future also? Hope so!
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Glad you enjoyed AMCP. Yes, I have four other novel length stories that have been completed, as well as two that are about half-done, and several others that are in lesser stages of completion.
DeleteColin
OK, you got me! LOL I can't wait to read this. I love the "What if" what would happen if things didn't go as written by Miss Austen. They are my favorite re-imaginings. Yours definitely has me intrigued. I wish you the best and look forward to reading it!
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Jane Austen certainly lends herself to that kind of imagining, and I also am a big fan of "Alternative History" novels, especially when the author pays proper attention to the actual historical record. In this case, the author has to keep true to the spirit of Miss Austen's writings and her times, and, with the help of my editor, Christina, I think we've done that with "Consequences." Hope you enjoy your read.
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Well......Book I sounds inriguing, and I can see why many would want to lynch you after it was published on a fan site; however, these two Consequences together sound fascinating. Congratuations to you to have the courage to follow the suggestions of your editor. Thank you for the giveaway!
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Well, it was only after Book 1. They did calm down somewhat after Book 2. But ya gotta be aware of the risks you're taking when you play too much with the Austen characters. But even I would never write a non Darcy & Elizabeth pairing.
DeleteColin
The comment below is from Christina Boyd. She has been unable to post a comment to the blog for some unknown reason. Per her request, I am posting it for her! Thanks, Christina, for taking the time to let me know and for allowing me to post for you!
ReplyDeleteHey lady, I've tried to comment on your blog a couple of times but it doesn't seem to want to take. I have either remarked several times or none. Sorry if its the former n litters up the thread.
"Awwww, Colin, you make me blush. Working with a pro like you -- yes you are a PRO now-- was easy; a Talented writer open to making their work better-- every editor's dream. This book will make your readers WEEP. Then weep for JOY. I have read it countless times as editor but several times prior to getting you to publish it, and I can truly say, it is a story that lingers with you. I hope people love it as much as I do. You deserve ever success. Working with you has been a joy-- truly a humble, clever, talented gentleman! Merry Christmas!
Btw I remember when my sister read this as a PDF at my insistence, and her calling from Atlanta sobbing. And so upset at my recommendation. Ha! I said I don't think you finished yet. She then realized Book2 was only a scroll away and completed the novel. LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL
But did she forgive you for recommending it? And will she read the published version?
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Of course she will read the published version- she is a huge JAFF reader.
DeleteColin, so glad to see another book coming from your talented pen (or computer in this age)! I loved A Civil Proposal, and I'd read your new book not only because you wrote it but because of your excellent editor. Having read numerous reviews by Christina, it's obvious she's a knowledgeable writer. Absolutely love the cover - so intriguing!
ReplyDeleteChristina was definitely a huge help. I had some plot holes to plug and some pesky phrasing problems to work on, and she pushed me to improve. She also suggested adding dialogue in a number of places that I had kind of breezed by with a sparse description. It will make the book more readable. And yes, I also like the cover, as I did Ellen's cover for AMCP. And, as a side note, I will say that your "An Arranged Marriage" story a decade ago was one that caught my interest and hooked me into this whole world of Austen. Many thanks for snagging me!
DeleteColin
I am SOOOOO glad you told us that the 1st part was just a bad dream! I think a lot of authors wouldn't, for fear of spoiling the effect, but we pitchfork-carrying Darcy/Lizzy fans need the reassurance. At least I do. I loved A Most Civil Proposal and look forward to reading this, and whatever else you have in the works for us next.
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Thanks, Monica. I thought some kind of preview was necessary, even though I didn't want to give everything away. I hope you enjoy reading it, since I certainly enjoyed writing it.
DeleteColin
Monica, haha! Colin & I had "just a few" email exchanges about it being a dream or NOT to answer some book club questions. I don't think it's just a bad dream... Alternative universe, parallel plane, etc etc. ??? You'll have to read it and decide for yourself. I think it's has too many suggestions to be simple as just a bad dream. But that's for Colin to decide. Muahahahahaha. Enjoy!
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DeleteThanks, Colin, for yet another fantastic book! It's always great to read variations written from the male perspective, and your books are a delight! Thanks for the giveaway opportunity and Happy Christmas!
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Thanks, and I hope you enjoy it. And we did have a merry Christmas. I hope your's was also happy.
DeleteColin
*gulp*...
ReplyDeleteCourage, Monica!
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It was such a pleasure to have you visit again, Colin. I can tell from the comments that your new book is generating lots of interest and definitely some angst! Thank you for the very intriguing post. Best wishes with this new release and Happy New Year to you and your family.
ReplyDeleteThank you for hosting me, Janet.
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I am looking forward to reading this book. It sounds intriguing. Will it be available on B&N for NOOK soon?
ReplyDeleteI am not sure of the release date for a nook eBook but it should be soon. I will see what I can find out. Reply with an email address using (at) for @ and I will contact you by email.
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